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"We must be neat at all times, Mother. Isn't that what you always told me?"

When?

I'm sorry, it's just really throwing me that Harvey has suddenly become a completely different character. Possibly SEVERAL different characters. His personality isn't just inconsistent with how he was before, it's inconsistent within the same scene.

"When he killed my mother, I went into shock[...]I couldn't believe what had happened. I wanted to be free of her, but not this way."

Then why did you put on the costume that you know turns you into a serial killer? Or did you not? But that doesn't make any sense either! Why did you put it on if you DIDN'T think you would attack her? How did you not know about the werewolf killings in town? MAKE THIS MAKE SENSE.

Missing quotation mark around "he."

"...facing the chipped, flaking paint on the Painter front door."

Well, then it sounds like they're not Painters, then.

Typo: The sentence "there must be something inside that house..." isn't capitalized.

So I guess he already knew he was the werewolf-murderer and was just okay with it? Might have shown him figuring that out. He also acted weird in this scene, more Hannibal Lecter-type serial killer than fits him.

Gretchen apparently hadn't heard about the werewolf-murderer in town, but I guess she doesn't seem like the type to keep up with current events.

"Honestly, I don't for the life of me understand a word you're saying."

Yeah, the dialogue in this part is especially bad. Only about half of the lines follow logically from whatever the previous one said.

I was wondering if Harvey has heard about the werewolf-clad murderer the whole town is hunting in the place where he normally hangs out, and if not, HOW he hasn't...and now the whole issue is made weirder because Gretchen is freaking out about his costume, but NOT because she suspects that he's the serial killer, but just because...he's not allowed to own a Halloween costume? Apparently?

"I believe you Warren" should have a comma.

Missing quotation mark.