mudslug’s Reviews > Spin the Dawn > Status Update

again on the direct exclamation, i’ve collected more:
“—tears of the moon!”
“—so much water!”
“—I could knit!”

dont use an em dash and break us out of the story just for some stupid shit. it’s such a lazy way to write surprise. you can convey awe by, idk, describing the the body of water&how bit it seems, or by how the character *feels* about being able to knit again.

i will keep reading tho.

“I froze. Let out a sharp breath.” “I let go. Released everything.” “I pinched my eyes shut, mustered a scowl.”
somebody teach elizabeth lim when to use a comma and when to say ‘and’

i’m having so much trouble understanding why i like this book. the writing is like. it’s not bad but it’s also not great. it leaves a little to be desired and the pacing is horrendous. in 200 pages we have gone from a poor port town, to losing family in the war, to competing in three sewing trials, to becoming imperial tailor, to travelling through the country & being stuck in the desert. it’s good but wow

TOADS AND TURDS GIRL

“there, behind a magnolia tree, was the emperor!” sometimes you can tell a story was written by a chinese person bc they write shit like this. just an exclamation directed straight at the reader. it happens in chinese cinderella a lot and my mother does it a lot too. i don’t rly notice it in other books. it really takes u out of the story i wish i could study why

“Something clicked in my mind, and I recognized the strange way Ammi was acting. She was flirting with me!” finally some ace representation

“obsequiously” really?

not sure about this magic system chief