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Debra Johnson
is 28% done
I love the uniqueness of this world but, I wish it was better written. As you can see below, the wording can be jumpy. There are earlier passages in the story that show the awkwardness better, but I chose this one.
"I wanted him to know I wasn’t gonna begrudge his cheating. I couldn’t even if I wanted to. I had to put up until I got away or died. I’d love to be the only one for him. Tonight, I wasn’t..."
— Jul 13, 2020 09:17AM
"I wanted him to know I wasn’t gonna begrudge his cheating. I couldn’t even if I wanted to. I had to put up until I got away or died. I’d love to be the only one for him. Tonight, I wasn’t..."
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Debra Johnson
is 45% done
You are probably wondering, 'Why are you reading this?' The world, characters and humor keep me going. I am actually a fan of Milana Jacks.
Here is a sample:
“I’m a peach, and I’m courting her. Every day I leave her a toy on the nightstand... “What is it?” “Anal hook.”..... “You going about it all wrong, bro.” “Too soon?”...“How would you court her?” “I’d go for the anal plug.”
— Jul 13, 2020 09:32AM
Here is a sample:
“I’m a peach, and I’m courting her. Every day I leave her a toy on the nightstand... “What is it?” “Anal hook.”..... “You going about it all wrong, bro.” “Too soon?”...“How would you court her?” “I’d go for the anal plug.”
Debra Johnson
is 30% done
This shows how the dialogue needs help. It is often jumpy and awkward.
“I didn’t mean to—”
“Yes, you did. You think I bought you to put you at home so I can go whore around.”
Okay, then. I shut up, didn’t want to piss him off anymore.
— Jul 13, 2020 09:20AM
“I didn’t mean to—”
“Yes, you did. You think I bought you to put you at home so I can go whore around.”
Okay, then. I shut up, didn’t want to piss him off anymore.
