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You are probably wondering, 'Why are you reading this?' The world, characters and humor keep me going. I am actually a fan of Milana Jacks.
Here is a sample:
“I’m a peach, and I’m courting her. Every day I leave her a toy on the nightstand... “What is it?” “Anal hook.”..... “You going about it all wrong, bro.” “Too soon?”...“How would you court her?” “I’d go for the anal plug.”
— Jul 13, 2020 09:32AM
Blind Beast Mate (Beast Mates, #1)

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Debra Johnson
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This shows how the dialogue needs help. It is often jumpy and awkward.

“I didn’t mean to—”
“Yes, you did. You think I bought you to put you at home so I can go whore around.”
Okay, then. I shut up, didn’t want to piss him off anymore.
— Jul 13, 2020 09:20AM
Blind Beast Mate (Beast Mates, #1)


Debra Johnson
Debra Johnson is 28% done
I love the uniqueness of this world but, I wish it was better written. As you can see below, the wording can be jumpy. There are earlier passages in the story that show the awkwardness better, but I chose this one.

"I wanted him to know I wasn’t gonna begrudge his cheating. I couldn’t even if I wanted to. I had to put up until I got away or died. I’d love to be the only one for him. Tonight, I wasn’t..."
— Jul 13, 2020 09:17AM
Blind Beast Mate (Beast Mates, #1)


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