Laura May’s Reviews > The Pandora Chronicles, Book 1 > Status Update

I still want to get out my sparkly green marker (no using red for me!), but the pace in this section is significantly better, and it's correspondingly more enjoyable.

Aaaagh (arrrr?), it's so close to being good, but there's just things getting in the way! Awkward dialogue, continuing sketchy grammar/attention to detail, and the odd jarring scene change. It really takes you out of the story, and it's driving me mental. Hopefully part 2 will see an up-swing!