Dawn’s Reviews > The Gemini Factor > Status Update
Dawn
is 51% done
This guy has promise--the detail is exquisite. But the story is too fragmented, too parallel. It's hard to keep everything straight, what's happening in what locale.
— Jun 09, 2015 06:50AM
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Dawn
is 22% done
Some improvement as I proceed. The beginning is a chaotic mess, but the story is settling down a bit now.
— Jun 05, 2015 11:49AM
Dawn
is 16% done
Too many locales, too many characters, too much busy busy busy going on. I have given up trying to keep it all straight.
— Jun 03, 2015 11:58AM
