Kamas Kirian’s Reviews > The Forlorn > Status Update
Kamas Kirian
is 73% done
the story has moved along nicely, good fast pace. still the problem of sudden jumps in descriptions that lead to go back and reread the previous few lines a few times to sort things out, but not as many, and I'm sort of expecting it now.
— Jan 11, 2016 09:41PM
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Kamas Kirian
is 37% done
So far fairly interesting. The gang is finally all together and working towards one end. The big downfall of the story so far has been how it jumps around. At first I thought I had missed something, but turning the page back showed it just jumped from one part of the story to another.
— Jan 06, 2016 09:23PM
