Peyton Carroll’s Reviews > The Marriage Act > Status Update

[continuation of last note]

but I feel that to create paranoia and an unsettling presence, don't define the word right of way, let the readers figure it out, and have the characters know that's happening. Let us, the readers, be in the dark. that's a thrilling reversed-situational irony: the characters know but the reader doesn't.

ive been meaning to make a note of this.

there's probably a reason to define AUDITE in the beginning. as I continue to read, that word just breaks my concentration. maybe it's so that whenever the characters allude to the audite, we the readers are reminded of what's it doing. if they have to watch what they're saying, so should we.

there are moments where I want to learn more about the environment, the government–simply put, I want to know what the outside world is. There are many moments where the scene rushes and not much is explained.