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Sophia Rose
Sophia Rose is on page 30 of 178
The blatant infantalization of our so far nameless main character is giving a little bit of ick, not to mention so many concepts that clash it makes my head spin...

I get wanting to be eloquent and precise when writing, but that doesn't mean you throw a thesaurus at your book. It becomes burdensome to read after a while.

I stg if I read "the little lady" one more time, I'm gonna barf.
Dec 06, 2024 09:59PM
The First Night (Days and Nights of a Gobliness Book 1)

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Sophia Rose
Sophia Rose is on page 52 of 178
We get it, the goblin is a hot little horn dog. Please stop rubbing our noses in it every other page. It's not even foreshadowing at this point. It's giving "oh no, I ordered pizza and don't have any money... How EVER can I pay you?" Iykyk
Dec 06, 2024 10:34PM
The First Night (Days and Nights of a Gobliness Book 1)


Sophia Rose
Sophia Rose is on page 10 of 178
I really want to like this book, but it's painfully obvious that the author did not have an editor. Maybe I'm picky, but the paragraphs being left aligned instead of justified makes it difficult to read in many places. Additionally, there's a lot of switches in tense, and things that don't seem to flow well. She's laying there for hours when she thinks she's being chased? Then throws up? The run on sentences too...
Dec 06, 2024 09:39PM
The First Night (Days and Nights of a Gobliness Book 1)


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