Status Updates From Vengeance

“Did you really believe I would ever allow a sick fuck like you to take what is mine?” the devil asked softly. And Azriel was the devil. Satan incarnate looked him in the eyes. --- I freaking love this book!!!

Ummm- okay. Yep, this book is off the rails. How do you get a girlfriend to disclose about her abusive childhood? Pull her across your lap and spank her ass, of course!

Wait, what happened? I'm so...what about the other interesting stuff brought up?! Are we going to ignore all the meaty bits for redundant sex scenes?! WHY?! I have so many questions and I'm already more than half way done with the book. And why is he now growling so much and cursing like a 12 year-old trying to sound like a bad ass?

So much plot development potential and now it is falling extremely flat.

So what was the point of that tantrum? Exactly nothing was accomplished or achieved. PS, I fell asleep during the sex scene.

You can't "nipple" at your bottom lip, and you can't "preen" during sex. What you CAN do is "nibble" and "keen". I also have a feeling that this story deserves a rewrite to be fleshed out more. The idea is there for a solid plot, but the execution needs work. With work, I could see this being a 5 star and optioned for a movie.

This story is pretty cool, but the author is in need of a good editor and proof-reader. Proof-reading is beyond important. It helps keep the reader in the moment, and assures that your voice and storyline are conveyed correctly.

This H is mega possessive, protective, and totally obsessed with the h.