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Reached Chapter 2...the writing is brilliant, energetic, entertaining, and lively. the writing style is clear, organized, and balanced between narration, scene, and dialogue. Eager to continue.

Reached Chapter 5...all is well (minus the redundant word on Chapter 4 page 1). This indie author has an impressive writing style for this story. I don't know if it's the first draft is something worked on, but I can't tell and it's well written and told. Nightly reading at this point.

I reached Chapter 3 and pretty much read Chapter 2 within 2 minutes. From line to line, page to page, the writing pulled me in and kept me going. The PTSD scene was done so well.

Reached Chapter 2...Chapter 1 was a refreshing read in all aspects...a wholesomely playful approach to military life from a unique POV with a balanced shift from human to animal narration...the plot and scenes were well-told (I wasn't even bothered by the writing style) and I did not want the chapter to end. It's a cute and sweet story that shows a heartwarming appreciation for cats. I already recommend this story!

Stopped a few pages into Chapter 3...the concept is intriguing though the plot isn't smooth and it's jumping between character POVs of characters not built. This might read better as an educational piece about the concept with realistic research. I rated 1 star because the type of writing seems inappropriate and because of that there seems to be no story being told, but rather philosophical thoughts.

Reached Chapter 2...Chapter 1 is well-written...the thoughts should be in italics because some of them read as responses to other characters...section breaks should be included between major scenes for a breath...the story is engaging so I will continue to Chapter 2.

Reached Chapter 3...the story is well-written so far...don't see any errors in the writing and the buildup to the chapter ending was satisfying...the addition of the characters at the farm were well-balanced with conversation, interaction, and facial expressions...the personas helped distinguish the additional characters and the progression into Chapter 3 is done well that I read the first page in curiosity...C3 next

Reached Chapter 2...In Chapter 1 there are comma abuse issues though they don't disrupt the storytelling...the descriptions are decent to great (tattoo descriptions were a bit lengthy, but everything else was well-written)...the flashbacks were incorporated smoothly...character personas and interactions were a joy to read...the cliffhanger was a joy to read and built excitment...look forward to Chapter 2

Reached Chapter 7...Chapter 5 and 6 present some punctuational errors though none distract from the reading similarly to previous chapters. This story is a joy to read. I look forward to Chapter 7.

Reached Chapter 5...sentence structure errors in Chapter 4 with a missing word, but again as previous chapters these do no takeaway from reading the story...gripped at this point to keep going, the quick flashbacks with the parents are well-written with strong character persona, the setting is incredible, the narration feels mature for the POV age, and I can't tell if this is a first draft or 50th, but ready for C5!!

Reached Chapter 4...oh, the storytelling pulls me further in..sentence structure and punctuation issues, but none bother me...the story is well told, carried well, and the character personas and developments are refreshing...it's sort of a relaxed read without a show of conflict though it's enjoyable to read and visualize the scenes. I'm eager to meet this person on the cover. I look forward to Chapter 4.

Reached Chapter 3...so far the storytelling is enjoyable with a comfortable pace and decent descriptions, worldbuilding, and setting. Context is given properly to different pieces that help shape the plot. Some sentence structure issues with punctuation errors, but these don't distract from reading the story. I appreciated the introductory warning about the content, so I look forward to Chapter 3.

Reached Chapter 2...Chapter 1 [Page 17] one typo...so far it's an interesting and decently written story, easy to follow, and has a light atmosphere to it for relaxed reading...nothing to be curious about or be pulled into, but the concept has me looking forward to reading more.

Paused at page 20 of the story...the storytelling keeps my interest going; mechanical issues will be provided privately...will continue reading soon

Reached EFFORTLESS section...so far the concept of this guide and its insight is refreshing. Straightforward and honest about the review market for stories. The quality of writing is decent, but has a blog-feel to it (as if it wasn't proofread and edited), yet, the thought is there and is easy to follow. Look forward to continuing...

Reached Chapter 7...writing feedback provided privately to author...otherwise a simple, fun, engaging story to follow...look forward to Chapter 7.

Reached Chapter 3...in Chapter 2 [Location 100] two punctuation errors; one word redundancy…[Location 147] two missing comma…[Location 178] love that subway scene WOW...looking forward to Chapter 3

Reached Chapter 3...in Chapter 1 [Location 100] two punctuation errors; one word redundancy…[Location 147] two missing comma…[Location 178] love that subway scene WOW...looking forward to Chapter 3

Reached Chapter 2…In Chapter 1 [Page 7] unnecessary word…[Page 9] two missing punctuations...otherwise, a slow-paced story that works well for the plot so far. Look forward to Chapter 2.

Reached Chapter 2/Rule #19, In Chapter 1/Rule #34…[Page 5] three few fluff words, two misused commas…[Page 6] six misused commas, one set of dialogue restructuring, five fluff words, one misused period…[Page 7/9] nine misused commas, one missing comma. Otherwise, engaging storytelling, light horror that reminds me of SAW. The errors don't take away from the writing so far. Interested in continuing.

Reached Chapter 5...Chapter 4 was excellent. I was too into the story to care about any writing improvements. I hope Chapter 5 opens Andrew because the back and forth with Kalli lowering his guard is dulling.

Reached Chapter 4. Chapter 3 is so good...didn't see any writing to improve...I really want to know Andrew's deal.

Reached Chapter 2...In Chapter 1 [Page 1] misused word...no other errors spotted, this chapter is oo la la!!!...Excited for Chapter 2!

Reached Chapter 1...the Prologue had a great sexual aspect to it, but I'm not sure what the plot is supposedly about. The vampire element is interesting, but confusing to follow sometimes. The ending of the prologue presents a twist about Lilith which I have some curiosity about so I will see what happens in Chapter 1.

Reached Prologue: Lilith...the Foreword was boring with heavy science-based information. It felt like a Stephen Hawking lecture rather than a quick and dummied reading about the Anti-verse. The last page of the foreword impressed a Stranger Things atmosphere with The Other Side. The Foreword also reads like a ramble with sentence structure issues and definition after definition. It seems researched, but an info-dump.

Finished Chapter 1...a smooth read, no errors seen. Onto 2. Traffic Jam

Prologue PDF page 3…don’t start sentences with “And” or “But”…fragment issues…page 4 has fragment issues and odd sentence structures…otherwise, a well-told prologue…onto 1% The Wolf Lady

it’s rather boring even though the writing quality is decent, but the story is not there…1 star because the writing was at least readable with potential for higher rating if the story is edited to draw interest and have sense.

Page 17… ‘mother’ (why in single quote?)… “I know her comment was only meant for me” (odd implication with five hundred people in the room)…stopped…the title gives an idea of what this short story is about, but the writing does not and there is no context as to who the mother is, also to single quote the word mother is a throw off and no detail is provided to understand…

this story seems like a draft in development that needs work, but has potential…3 stars for the writing quality with potential for higher rating with editing on the style and development.