Annika’s Reviews > Verity > Status Update

This a is romance sure, but are the horny comments after his every word necessary? And look, you only like him cuz he’s hot, you’re a damsel and he saved you. It’s not any deeper, so don’t act like it is.
Why are you mad at the ex cuz you saw the accident, not that he belittled you by telling you it was earlier? Yes, it was traumatic (apparently, I’ve seen little based on her actions and thoughts) but that didn’t bug you? At all?
He takes the head of the table —> reinforcing that power imbalance
Ok so it was all delivered. Still.
Ngl, if you didnt like her, why don’t you over do the morphine? You seemed interested in keeping it for yourself, what’s a little matricide? Did she guilt you into caring for her? But you seemed interested to blame her for everything, wouldn’t leaving her in the dust be the best way to repay that? Or again, matricide.
Why is this guy still your agent? It’s the desperation isn’t it. Also, he’s a shit agent if he assumed you and your character were similar. What if she was a serial killer? Would he assume you were too? Lazy, dumb excuse for his attraction to her. Unbiased in your career? Uh where did you get that idea from? I’ve known you all of 20 pages and that doesn’t make any sense.
“He only sweats when he’s nervous.” Duh, he didn’t go for a run before this meeting, and you haven’t mentioned the room is warm. This is a nothing sentence.

The swearing feels like a middle schooler who just leaned a cuss word. None of it feels authentic. This reads as a woman you says “makes love” not “fucks.” No writerly language in her descriptions or dialogue.
Why is Barron referred to as Goddamnit Barron every time. You can keep her humor at it being his real name without treating it as such. It drags.
NO ONE more well known was considered for this? This admitted second rate writer gets offered a golden goose? Not buying that for a second. Verity’s genre can’t be that niche if it’s as popular as it seems to be. This whole deal seems so fake.
More coincidences to give her this opportunity. Let her earn it instead of it seeming lucky.
Why are we calling people “Chronics” that who thing feels fake. That’s called being cursed. No need for this new word.
Why is he being so generous? It’s cuz she’s hot isn’t it.

Just snuck a peek at the next chapter. More sex stuff, how clever 😐