Avah’s Reviews > Three Shattered Souls > Status Update

it’s actually not making a lick of sense to me why everyone is assuming tiyung is a traitor. he was literally in fantasy guantanamo for the whole last book.

random commas everywhere. commas also omitted everywhere. periods and em dashes abused beyond measure. not a semicolon to be found. all the paragraphs are 3 sentences long. nobody wants to WRITE anymore no one wants to get off their ass and WRITE.

tiyung was the only guy i gave a fuck about in the last book and he’s been so BORING in this one.. i guess kill your darlings is OUT, make your darlings into boring passive paper dolls is IN

truly the only thing that’s happened in this book so far is they arrive at a location and then immediately leave the location.. they don’t even do things at the locations usually

sorry i’m trying not to update every single page but it’s so bad. “laoli is an extremely potent pain reliever, but Sun-ye’s not in obvious pain. It looks far more recreational, which means she’s addicted.” brother, i guessed she was addicted when she snorted white powder in the middle of a casual conversation. DESTROY YA

“forgiveness isn’t forgetting. I have forgiven her— I did last night. But I’d have to have no memory to let her hurt me again.” every paragraph is written with sentences this bad OR WORSE. and yes the paragraphs are 3 sentences each, no longer.

i’ve just read a chapter that was a single page long for no reason whatsoever . shut down the presses, close the publishing houses, leave those trees in the paper farm alone until we figure out what the fuck is happening

“the scepter pulls water directly out of my body, and now the toll is twice as bad as it was the first time.” brother you should be Dead. like dead dead .. this magic is so ass

the writing is ridiculously bad…