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Juli Pennock
is 55% done
I just don't know. It started out rather gritty and, within the confines of the mind-control conceit, realistic. I wasn't enjoying the writing or the copious typos, but I was engrossed in the story. The protagonist has a lot of potential. THEN, it took a sharp-right into <spoiler> Lazarus is still around, religious war, church-stuff, </spoiler>and I'm not feeling it at all. Will give it a bit more time/not hopeful.
— Nov 09, 2013 10:43PM
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Juli Pennock
is 68% done
I'm trying, I really am, there were so many run-on sentences sentence fragments; and are independent clauses connected by commas and, misuse of commas, semicolons it's, annoying me a lot, and general grammar goofs I didn't know if I can continue it.
Ugh. I'm a bitch...and I'm not that sorry.
— Jan 07, 2014 06:30PM
Ugh. I'm a bitch...and I'm not that sorry.
Juli Pennock
is 44% done
Although I find the premise intriguing, I'm frustrated at the horrid punctuation (and I'm not talking about the differences in UK rules vs US rules), many tense mistakes, and a lot of really clunky sentences. Don't get me wrong: there's some good stuff here, and a bit of the writing is even good, but overall...not. Really could have been amazing, but I'm finding it simply pretty good. Disappointed :(
— Nov 09, 2013 09:16PM
